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Chrome Dragoon and biodaemon2, you two have created a hot event in the Hermpire series. The progression and transition from clean to infected, lusty herms is great. One suggestion I have would be to pay attention to tense changes, as there seem to be a lot of past/present shifts in mid-paragraph. Even with those grammatical glitches, the scene is exciting to read and I hope you decide to continue it or extend one of the other Hermpire branches.
Heh, yea, sorry about the tense problems. I'm used to playing in Shangirla (present tense) and writing papers (past tense) so if I'm in a hurry I tend to get mixed up. I'll try to reign it in ;)
Glad to see someone's enjoying our words!
So, would you prefer the present tense then from now on?
Actually, in retrospect, perhaps we should just change to simple past-tense? Might be easier.
I'll stick to past tense :)